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I'd thought I'd show everyone Billy Bob Joe Fred Studios's latest film. It's really short, so give it a shot. It's the first time we* published a fictional film, so we'd like lot's of feedback.

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Notes.
-We do not encourage crime in any way. Crime is not cool, so, don't commit crimes!
-Ignore the bursts of static that periodically happen. I wasn't there at the filming, so even I don't know the cause.
-We did get permission from both stores shown in the film to show their name and phone number.
-There was no script, it was all ad-libbed on the spot.

*We as in TheDuke(Simon Williams) and the rest of the regular BBJF crew, which is me, and that's about it. Although I didn't do a ton of work on this particular film, I'm just the tech guy to help with editing and fix computer issues.

The guy in the hood smiles too much and speaks like he's deaf. The black guy, while it would be totally stereotypical, would've been a more believable robber.
All in all not bad.

haasd0gg wrote:The guy in the hood smiles too much and speaks like he's deaf. The black guy, while it would be totally stereotypical, would've been a more believable robber.
All in all not bad.

Smiling too much, yeah, I can probably see that. The 'speaks like he's deaf' part is supposed to be his lack of confidence, but he could have spoken up a little. The 'black guy' would have been the more believable robber(I guess?) but the idea was that the hooded guy isn't believable, he's supposed to look like he doesn't belong.

Thanks for the feedback.

haasd0gg wrote:All in all not bad.

I ain't a film critic

haasd0gg wrote:

haasd0gg wrote:All in all not bad.

I ain't a film critic

You don't have to be. Thanks for the feedback.